Profound Poem For The Weekend

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Robert
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Sat Oct 28, 2006 2:37 pm

Mars Bars

There are no prisons on planet Mars
They’ve gone and eaten the chocolate bars!



i.m. of Spike Milligan


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Sat Oct 28, 2006 3:08 pm

Short and sweet.....(I hear the BPA groaning)

You could stick some of these together to make a song :)

Out for a pint with a couple of the lads tonight if you fancy a laugh. We'll probably hit Vegas at some point. (mob. 07704768103).
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Sun Oct 29, 2006 9:22 am

Is this an example of martian poetry?

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Sun Oct 29, 2006 11:02 am

Indeed it is Mac. Without wrappers of course.

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Sun Oct 29, 2006 11:23 am

I'm glad that the Good Ship Venus has already been done. Maybe you should do your own Planet Suite in verse.

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Mon Oct 30, 2006 1:58 pm

Interesting,

Is a bad pun a kind of "own gaol"?
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Tue Oct 31, 2006 9:16 pm

Good idea Barrie. I can see it now, 'The Planet Sweet' with sherbet dip stuck to the front cover.

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Wed Nov 01, 2006 10:15 am

Moon Rocks (space dust) popping in the background :) . Galaxy, Milky Way, Star Bars. Definitely some material to work with.
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Wed Nov 01, 2006 7:44 pm

Cheers for the suggestions Mick.

Today, while doing some painting in A-u-L I was up a ladder thinking of Venus and a packet of Love Hearts.

Oh dear!

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Wed Nov 01, 2006 8:50 pm

You've been watching too much "Futurama". It just brought the image back to me :) .
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