Eclipse

[camus]

Inspired by my misinterpretation of a fine poem by Mr Moose.

A hidden evening, cloaked by motionless trees,
a frailty to their lank demure, lost in their silent

leaves. Huddled we sit, your odd gloves, making
light of the anticipation, we share a flask for the

first time, bonding over steaming tea and a rustling
in the bracken. I take your hand, you smile, trust is

a simple touch and the stillness of the night crackles.
I lead you to the waters edge, coots smack wings

against a tremulous air, squawk our arrival, then glide
into submission, gabbling, yakking themselves into

silence. Lost in the complex rituals of seeking a mate,
at our frightened faces, alive in the lake, we forget the

light as it quickly pales and our burdens are halved
as the moon is eclipsed and our reflections fade;

just you and me, and this beautiful calm.

[that girl]

This is an absolutely beautiful poem, camus. I wouldn't change a thing.
.tg.

[Thomas]

hi Camus really is a good poem some great thoughtfull lines my favourite being......... a simple touch and the stillness of the night crackles.
I lead you to the waters edge..............

great line...good poem Tom....

[The Moose]

The Moose approves of this excellent, if not a touch more ethereal, revision.

[camus]

Thanks guys and Gal.

[camus]

harumphhhhhhhhhhhh

[that girl]

I'm sorry, camus, do you have a pimp in your throat?
Could I offer you some water?

[camus]

lol sure.

I'm in a B&B in Leeds, on dial up, I need all the help I can get.

You won't get that will you?

[that girl]

sigh, no. I won't.

Thats what happens when people live in missouri and are born in the wrong decade, they don't get things.

care to explain?

[camus]

Not really,

Lets talk about life

[that girl]

Here? In open forum?

ok, why not.

How is your life?
How is life treating you?
and
What is the meaning of life?

[camus]

Odelay

[camus]

I may well delete the last post, whatdya think?

[that girl]

I didn't even get a chance to read it...

[Arcadian]

Excellent Camus,

I dips my lid , to my way of thinking it is the best poem you have written to date.

Im going to ask Cameron to have this featured - I hope he agrees with me

I loved this , awesome buddy !

Arco

[cameron]

Cor blimey guvnor, how many featured poems does one geezer need?

[Sean Kinsella]

I'm not the greatest fan of modern poetic forms, but this poem could change my way of thinking...well done Camus, an excellent effort.

BEST REGARDS
SEAN KINSELLA

[camus]

Bump for David - I do sentimental.

[David]

Bloody hell, so you do. Suits you sir.

Good to know you're not a cynical cantankerous git (and I mean that in a good way) all the time.

[cameron]

"I'm in a B&B in Leeds, on dial up, I need all the help I can get. "

What a great line Kris.

Could you write a film script to put it in?

[ccvulture]

Bumpetty bump. Excellent couplets.

"trust is a simple touch and the stillness of the night crackles."

Sweet.

Cheers

Stu