Turning
from a day’s TV,
make-up & news:
‘arrest that blemish,
fall that flag -
fill in the rest.’
Staid work this, ‘cept
for fat eye-balls
left, buttoned down
Torches on screens
Interesting poem this, not as simple as it looks. I get a nice mix of possible interpretations, with lazy/off/unemployed being at the top.
But, I didn't quite get the last stanza if that's the case. The last 2 lines suggest to me eyes, full with the days dross, becoming bloated, heavy and shut. Or perhaps closed off to the world, ignoring truth. But I didn't get the "cept" as it makes it a contrasting image to what went before, when I felt that was a supporting image.
Does that make sense?
Would appreciate some enlightenment, to know how way off I am!
TDF
But, I didn't quite get the last stanza if that's the case. The last 2 lines suggest to me eyes, full with the days dross, becoming bloated, heavy and shut. Or perhaps closed off to the world, ignoring truth. But I didn't get the "cept" as it makes it a contrasting image to what went before, when I felt that was a supporting image.
Does that make sense?
Would appreciate some enlightenment, to know how way off I am!
TDF
meh and bah are wonderful words
Yeah, I probably should have been more specific...
I was thinking about the Olympic relay in fact - so you were a little far off the mark, but watching TV as a job would be somewhat flattening!
Visual news is traumatic and damn frustrating - trying to pull a bit of that out.
Thanks for the comment, I'm new to this internet business,
du bois
I was thinking about the Olympic relay in fact - so you were a little far off the mark, but watching TV as a job would be somewhat flattening!
Visual news is traumatic and damn frustrating - trying to pull a bit of that out.
Thanks for the comment, I'm new to this internet business,
du bois
oh, well, um... haha i didn't get that obviosuly.du bois wrote:I was thinking about the Olympic relay in fact
Ah, interesting. I got more apathy than frustration.Visual news is traumatic and damn frustrating - trying to pull a bit of that out.
My pleasure. Welcome to the wondeful world of teh intanetz!Thanks for the comment, I'm new to this internet business,
TDF
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Now that you've explained you were watching the Olympic Torch, Woody ( 
),
"arrest that blemish" takes on a new meaning.
"Fall a flag" - sounds a bit contrived - could you use "bring down"?
Love and peace and world union through sport : cue Coca Cola..
What a load of bullocks, eh?
Geoff
),"arrest that blemish" takes on a new meaning.
"Fall a flag" - sounds a bit contrived - could you use "bring down"?
Love and peace and world union through sport : cue Coca Cola..
What a load of bullocks, eh?
Geoff
Thanks for the reply.
You're right, 'fall that flag' doesn't quite work. But 'bring down' clashes with the final line though. How about 'hide'? Not sure about the title either, 'torches on screens' sounds affected too. What about 'Olympic relay' - trying to keep it simple and more intelligible?
Turning
from a day’s TV,
make-up & news:
‘arrest that blemish,
hide that flag -
fill in the rest.’
Staid work this, ‘cept
for fat eye-balls
left, buttoned down
You're right, 'fall that flag' doesn't quite work. But 'bring down' clashes with the final line though. How about 'hide'? Not sure about the title either, 'torches on screens' sounds affected too. What about 'Olympic relay' - trying to keep it simple and more intelligible?
Turning
from a day’s TV,
make-up & news:
‘arrest that blemish,
hide that flag -
fill in the rest.’
Staid work this, ‘cept
for fat eye-balls
left, buttoned down