Bourbon Creams

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dogofdiogenes
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Wed Dec 31, 2008 8:42 pm

Hi everyone,

Haven't posted for some months, but want to get back into the habit. I am pretty sure my brain has poodled lately and am now trying to get back onto the dog-so's to speak.....jacq aka dogofdiogenes

Bourbon Creams

He hates Bourbons,
hates adverts on TV.
He hates the jokes which aren't his own
but he likes me.

He hates his job and
smokers and coffee;
He hates my mother who mothers him but
he loves himself with me.


Happy New Year, everyone!! :D
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Thu Jan 01, 2009 9:13 am

Its yummy! :D Welcome back, Dg.
Liked the images immensely, but still trying to see the connection between the piece and the title"Bourbon Creams". Intruiging.
Cheers.
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Thu Jan 01, 2009 11:00 am

I enjoyed this particularly the first stanza. I would have liked more but I think that was beacause I felt I was just getting to know him when the poem ended.
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Thu Jan 01, 2009 11:04 am

Hi

I personally read the title to be alluding to "nothing special or remarkable".
In direct contrast to how "special" the he has become as a result of the interaction with the N.
It´s a case of, a good man has a good woman to encourage him to be so.
Nice poem, no acrobatics or fancy metaphors, but a good solid message put over clearly.

Enjoyed

all the best

Danté
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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