Made-in Heresy

[Cryptic Cadence]

Earth brings a memory here, distant as the Irish cattle-herd fairs,
but vivid as the birth of a firstborn.

A golden kiss greets me, reminds me of a better day...but the cold north winds still linger,
fragmenting it. This ghostly shell watches in vain.

Earth festers and my essence desicates, useless but for treading upon.
The oddment is not a modern caricature of dysphoria,
but an immutable realization, in that narrow band of the mental spectrum that allows nothing to flow.
Where adolescent emotions have to be wrung out, and our existentialist nature synthesizes.

When utilitarianism fails and we cry out for Gradgrind.
When what little of our imagistic hemisphere disconnects.
It makes us a caryatid, a weight for for the world.

In the midst of channelling a wronged symbol of peace,
Boreas releases his conch shell, and this mind takes flight.
Away from here. This revelation, soon a transient memory.

[David]

Wow. Really enjoyed this, CC. A little verbose, a little clichéd in places, but overall an enjoyable and surprising read.

I'm sure the title's very meaningful, but I don't get it.

Cheers

David

[Lovely]

I love it. Real feelings. Love you................

ever ...........


DJL x

[Cryptic Cadence]

Hi guys, thanks for the comments. I agree with David, it is indeed too verbose, it was done about 10 months ago, I was the ultimate newbie back then so I got a little over enthusiastic, but I'm learning how to use the more interesting words carefully now by reading how the experienced poets on this forum do it.

Cheers

[mesmie]

Hey CC

I too think this is great, read this first this morning,

and our existentialist nature synthesizes....I like this.

thanks muchly for the read.
mes

[Elphin]

CC

Worth bringing out of the drawer and lots to go on if you want to work on it.

distant as the Irish cattle-herd fairs is a cracker of a line. After that too many big words for my simple mind.

elph

[David]

distant as the Irish cattle-herd fairs is a cracker of a line.

It is. That was the one that really made me sit up and take notice.