Haiku Train

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JohnLott
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he's going bankrupt
his cat has been run over
and his yacht has sunk
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RichardSanders
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and his yacht has sunk
and his mother used to say
just your luck Sonny
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Just your luck Sonny
Words echoed inside his head
my name is Richard
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my name is Richard
call me Dick if you prefer
know your enemy
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know your enemy
my own is technology
hence the long silence
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hence the long silence
along the Chinese border
no speekee engleesh
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no speekee engleesh
the wall stretches far and wide
through their internet
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through their internet
corpuscular spam collects
suddenly - it stops
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
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JohnLott
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suddenly it stops
from the penthouse 4g to
basement compiler
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basement compiler -
led zep t-shirt, doc martens
no July sunshine
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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no July sunshine -
thirty one cloudless days from
Gaius Thurinus?
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Gaius Thurinus
Ghosts of hero's haunt the net
Check his facebook page
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Check his Facebook page
Profile subject to contract
no handling of goods please
A mop and Marigolds,words and wondering, Poetic cleansing in my soul.
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no handling goods please -
Metropolitan Police
would like a quick word . . .
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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would like a quick word . . .
Is this you in the picture?
Disengaged? Angry?
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
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Sun Aug 14, 2011 9:56 pm

Disengaged? Angry?
Unfocused and with negativity,
Finally snapped
A mop and Marigolds,words and wondering, Poetic cleansing in my soul.
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RichardSanders
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Finally snapped
JustShirls broke a wheel bearing
Haiku train derailed?
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Haiku train derailed?
No don't switch the focal point!
Leave it on the track!
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
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RichardSanders
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Mon Aug 22, 2011 12:06 pm

Leave it on the track!
Leave all your baggage behind.
Bandit on the run.
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Wed Aug 31, 2011 7:21 am

Bandit on the run.
Good God this is farcical
Let's get after them.
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"Let's get after them"
ten years have taught you fuck all,
xenophobia.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Xenophobia
who are foreigners these days?
web community.
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Web community
Paradoxically so
alienating
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
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Alienating
Because you can't trust people
You don't really know
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
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Fri Sep 23, 2011 7:28 pm

You don't really know
relativity rules all
knowing is fleeting
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