It all started
when she got
a mobile phone
and outsourced
the memory
of her mother's
number
and birthday.
Sometime later,
she bought her
a dog.
Outsourcing ourselves
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Don't get it.
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.
I contemplate such bitter stuff.
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Some kind of distancing. Removing closeness. More could be made of it. Interesting idea. Putting responsibility in arms of others. Dog as substitute for mother?
Hello, Tristan.
OK, here goes nothing.
She lives at home with her old grey haired mother. When she gets a mobile she gets a life. She 'outsources' her old grey haired mother's number to family and friends, they can take some of the responsibility for mum now.
Feeling a tad guilty she buys her old grey haired mum a cocker spaniel for company as she is not around so much now.
I know it's crap but I like it.
Regards.
Pat.
P.S. I can't tell you what I think of the poem until I know what it is about.
OK, here goes nothing.
She lives at home with her old grey haired mother. When she gets a mobile she gets a life. She 'outsources' her old grey haired mother's number to family and friends, they can take some of the responsibility for mum now.
Feeling a tad guilty she buys her old grey haired mum a cocker spaniel for company as she is not around so much now.
I know it's crap but I like it.
Regards.
Pat.
P.S. I can't tell you what I think of the poem until I know what it is about.
What the hell do I know about poetry?
It's pretty clear to me what it's about - the phone now remembers her mother's number and birthday, so she doesn't have to, so she gradually stops caring about her mother, and ends up outsourcing the caring to a dog.
However I don't think the brevity is justified by the wit; there just isn't enough here. It's just a thumbnail sketch.
However I don't think the brevity is justified by the wit; there just isn't enough here. It's just a thumbnail sketch.
fine words butter no parsnips