Haiku Train

New to poetry? Unsure about the quality of your work? Then why not post here to receive some gentle feedback.
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barrie
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Sun Sep 21, 2008 6:23 pm

Have you four candles?
Why don't you go and four cough -
I won't fall for that!
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Sun Sep 28, 2008 7:27 am

I won't fall for that!
Only an idiot would
think the earth was round.
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Sun Sep 28, 2008 12:07 pm

Think. The earth was round.
Then you went and sat on it,
killing dinosaurs.
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Sun Sep 28, 2008 11:28 pm

Killing dinosaurs
is a national past time
for time travelers.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Mon Sep 29, 2008 2:33 am

For time travelers,
happy pills are redundant -
life runs like clockwork.
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Mon Sep 29, 2008 6:05 pm

life runs like clockwork,
but here comes that damn spanner,
see how it runs now.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Tue Sep 30, 2008 1:11 pm

See how It runs now,
It used to run so slowly,
now It makes good time.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Tue Sep 30, 2008 6:08 pm

Now it makes good time,
does it make any real sense
out of the random?
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
kozmikdave
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Thu Oct 02, 2008 10:02 pm

Out of the random
Greek number generator
came the letter pi.
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Sat Oct 04, 2008 5:16 pm

Came the letter pi
with its constant ratio
confusing my mind.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sun Oct 05, 2008 10:34 am

Confusing my mind,
Jumble of words knotted tight
just to make it worse
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Sun Oct 05, 2008 10:51 am

Just to make it worse,
rub your rash with sandpaper,
then see a doctor.
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Sun Oct 05, 2008 1:40 pm

"then see a doctor"
he gave me a week off work
for recovery.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sun Oct 05, 2008 2:45 pm

For recovery
place a bucket on your head
make it go away
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Sun Oct 05, 2008 4:54 pm

make it go away
it scares the hell out of me
like tantric bondage
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sun Oct 05, 2008 9:31 pm

Like tantric bondage,
Hell has evaporated,
instead of freezing
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Sun Oct 05, 2008 9:48 pm

Instead of freezing
the gas will evaporate
this will make it cool.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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This will make it cool
along with some icicles
taken from your stare
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Mon Oct 06, 2008 8:05 am

taken from your stare,
seems a little personal
am I paranoid?
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
Ladyhawk
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Mon Oct 06, 2008 7:20 pm

am I paranoid?
your raining on my parade
riding on my train
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Tue Oct 07, 2008 11:16 am

riding on my train
like a demented poet
looking for a word
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Tue Oct 07, 2008 2:56 pm

looking for a word,
that refuses to appear
from darkest corners
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
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Tue Oct 07, 2008 3:02 pm

from darkest corners,
the icicles appear again,
not personal though

with the "icy stare"
it might seem so. However,
just coincidence :P
In the beginning there was nothing, and it exploded. (Terry Pratchett on the Big Bang Theory)
TDF
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Tue Oct 07, 2008 4:07 pm

not personal though,
well it bloody well should be!
it's a birthday card.
meh and bah are wonderful words
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Tue Oct 07, 2008 7:31 pm

it's a birthday card?
no wonder it tastes awful,
I thought it was bread.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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