At 50
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He said,
"I am so very weary.
I am so very cold.
I am afraid we're getting
so very quickly, old."
She said,
"I am so very human,
You needn't be so shy.
I am so very tired
of wondering- what if? and why?
So, come to me now weary.
Come to me when you're cold.
Boy, come to me now, quickly,
I'll show you we're not so old."
"I am so very weary.
I am so very cold.
I am afraid we're getting
so very quickly, old."
She said,
"I am so very human,
You needn't be so shy.
I am so very tired
of wondering- what if? and why?
So, come to me now weary.
Come to me when you're cold.
Boy, come to me now, quickly,
I'll show you we're not so old."
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My husband is turning 50 next week. This pivotal turn in the road has been an underlying theme in most conversations this year.
I had titled it something else, don't even remember what?, but when I put it up, "At 50" seemed to sum it up.
I intend to grow old gracefully, and you can't do that, without having some naughty fun.
The response to this poem has been a great surprise. Thank you for the nice feedback.
Suzanne (I am 47 3/4)
I had titled it something else, don't even remember what?, but when I put it up, "At 50" seemed to sum it up.
I intend to grow old gracefully, and you can't do that, without having some naughty fun.
The response to this poem has been a great surprise. Thank you for the nice feedback.
Suzanne (I am 47 3/4)
Greatly enjoyed Susanne,
Nice to see your diversity coming over in varying subjects.
Danté 46 and a big bit
Nice to see your diversity coming over in varying subjects.
Danté 46 and a big bit
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
All right, children - Barrie, fifty bloody nine and five days and still having fun. Isn't time wonderful?
Leave 'so' out of the last line - the rhythm's better without it and you've already started the verse with it.
So, come to me now weary.
Come to me when you're cold.
Boy, come to me now, quickly,
I'll show you we're not old." - Maybe you make the first and second line echo each other -
Come to me when you're weary,
come to me when you're cold.
Come to me now, quickly!
I'll show you were not old. - Just some senile thoughts.
Barrie
Leave 'so' out of the last line - the rhythm's better without it and you've already started the verse with it.
So, come to me now weary.
Come to me when you're cold.
Boy, come to me now, quickly,
I'll show you we're not old." - Maybe you make the first and second line echo each other -
Come to me when you're weary,
come to me when you're cold.
Come to me now, quickly!
I'll show you were not old. - Just some senile thoughts.
Barrie
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
brilliant suz
s2, line 2 - i think without the "so" it flows better. up to you
ive got a thing for older women anyways, youve got nothin to worry about
harrison (i had no idea of the ages of yous lot, you all seemed younger.. nice to see such diversity)
s2, line 2 - i think without the "so" it flows better. up to you
ive got a thing for older women anyways, youve got nothin to worry about
harrison (i had no idea of the ages of yous lot, you all seemed younger.. nice to see such diversity)
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the "so" s, both of them, bring out a very nice twinkle in my brown eyes when read aloud, you'll have to pull out your imaginations to make it fit into the rhythm. It can work like butter on toast.
Thanks for the suggestions though, it is really fun to get them.