I know where I am,
in the forests of the cities
where concrete trees hang shadows
to hide the choking mist.
And I remember the future
with its war is hell and
cake is good.
Been down by the banks of
the Sylvan Wye, have I. I remember.
Seen it all.
Seen It All.
- unchained soul
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Hi Till Death,
I liked this poem. Particularly liked the lines "where concrete trees hang shadows to hide the choking mist".
Very good.
Rach
I liked this poem. Particularly liked the lines "where concrete trees hang shadows to hide the choking mist".
Very good.
Rach
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Hello, I def agree with Rachael. but Im not sure about the two I s together "have I. I remember" but maybe you have a reason. But I quite enjoyed this, consice and to the point with great visuals. best wishes mj
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Thanks. It took a whole 60 seconds to write, so I'm glad my hard work has been so well-received.