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Tue Sep 22, 2009 12:16 pm

Floating crescent shines
silver on her, recumbent.
The fisherman's gift.
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Tue Sep 22, 2009 12:26 pm

fisherman's gift
a frozen mermaid
from Ice age
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Tue Sep 22, 2009 6:47 pm

from ice age
to global warming
blooming snow lotus
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Tue Sep 22, 2009 7:52 pm

"Bloomin' slow Lotus!"
said the man in the tweed cap,
kicking the flat tyre.
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Wed Sep 23, 2009 5:06 am

kicking the flat tyre
in the middle of road
kites circle overhead
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Wed Sep 23, 2009 6:27 am

Kites circle over
Small children hanging on strings.
A chinese autumn.
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Wed Sep 23, 2009 11:47 am

A Chinese autumn
is subject to instruction:
the leaves don't listen.
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Wed Sep 23, 2009 11:57 am

leaves don't listen
they visit hidden corners
of a garden
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Wed Sep 23, 2009 8:51 pm

of a garden
he spoke of and pined
green fingers itching
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Thu Sep 24, 2009 8:05 am

green fingers itching
dragonfly glued
to a leaf bud
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Fri Sep 25, 2009 6:44 pm

to a leaf bud
sun will conspire an open
photosynthesis
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Sep 26, 2009 5:40 am

photosynthesis
sweet energy, wet green limbs
begging for sunshine.
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Sat Sep 26, 2009 4:02 pm

Begging for sunshine...
Huh, this man does not take his
sunbathing lightly.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Sun Sep 27, 2009 1:48 pm

sunbathing lightly
hostas growing abundant
flowers under an oak
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Sun Sep 27, 2009 5:04 pm

Flowers under anorak [!..sorry...]
he waited on her doorstep:
he was only ten.

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Mon Sep 28, 2009 12:56 pm

He was only ten –
not bad for a stick insect –
ravaged by woodworm.
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Mon Sep 28, 2009 5:46 pm

ravaged by woodworm
a tree stump rots under
spiralling mushrooms
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Mon Sep 28, 2009 6:28 pm

spiralling mushrooms
moist forest floor carpeted
with butterflies wings.
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With butterfly wings
I shall ascend to the stars
in opium dreams.
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Mon Sep 28, 2009 8:23 pm

in opium dreams
he dances with la luna
pillow in his arms
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Tue Sep 29, 2009 4:39 am

pillow in his arms
eyelids heavy
a crowded bus
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Tue Sep 29, 2009 4:16 pm

a crowded bus,
people just want to go home:
no room for bombers
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Tue Sep 29, 2009 6:31 pm

no room for bombers
sheer layers protect nothing
explosive words fly.
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Wed Sep 30, 2009 5:47 am

explosive words fly
in a meeting of sparrows
ants explore their lunch
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Thu Oct 01, 2009 1:52 pm

ants explore their lunch
permeate the Tupperware
antennae aloft
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