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Mon Nov 30, 2009 3:48 pm

Weather bulletins
can never be relied on.
The rain it raineth.
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Mon Nov 30, 2009 7:20 pm

the rain, it raineth,
dark cloud around my shoulders
water cup, wet hands.
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Mon Nov 30, 2009 7:50 pm

Water, cup, wet hands,
I turned on the tv. Bang!
Hello Saint Peter.
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Mon Nov 30, 2009 9:19 pm

Hello, Saint Peter,
you've captured my heart gently-
Shall I wait right here?
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Tue Dec 01, 2009 4:52 am

Shall I wait right here?
wonders the frog
on lily pad
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Tue Dec 01, 2009 4:49 pm

On a lily pad
jotted princely details
paradigm shift kiss.
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 4:54 pm

Paradigm shift. Kiss
goodbye to familiars;
it’s all new from here.
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 5:00 pm

it's all new from here
the sky will always be blue
you'll be my sunshine.
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Thu Dec 03, 2009 1:19 pm

You'll be my sunshine,
my photosynthetic strength,
become part of me.
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Thu Dec 03, 2009 6:29 pm

Become part of me
and I will .... .... .... ....
become part of you.
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Thu Dec 03, 2009 7:12 pm

become part of you
become part of everyone
DNA goes on
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Fri Dec 04, 2009 11:53 am

DNA goes on,
every raindrop has your name,
how can that go on?
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Fri Dec 04, 2009 12:04 pm

How can that go on,
when they could do this instead?
It’s so contrary.
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Fri Dec 04, 2009 1:43 pm

It's so contrary
to pickle tigers in brine
for their protection.
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Fri Dec 04, 2009 3:52 pm

for their protection
they changed their given names
anonymity
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Sat Dec 05, 2009 8:58 am

Anonymity
blessed anonymity.
Now I am not me.
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Sat Dec 05, 2009 12:15 pm

Now I am not me
said the frog to its image
on water
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Sat Dec 05, 2009 5:53 pm

on water
my reflection blurrs the sky
without you I'm lost.
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Sat Dec 05, 2009 6:52 pm

"Without ewes I'm lost"
said the shepherd to his dog.
The dog said nothing.
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Sat Dec 05, 2009 7:17 pm

the dog said nothing
she wiggled around the room
she was so smitten.
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Sun Dec 06, 2009 10:22 am

the dog said nothing
because his bone
was lying dead
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Sun Dec 06, 2009 12:24 pm

Was lying deadly
serious in the context
of marital vows?
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Sun Dec 06, 2009 12:37 pm

of marital vows
they were constantly aware-
her glass still half full.
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Sun Dec 06, 2009 1:32 pm

Her glass still half full
but his seeming half empty.
Time for a refill?
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Sun Dec 06, 2009 2:28 pm

time for a refill
at the end of the road
a tired car
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