Personality Beige

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firefly
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Fri Jan 15, 2010 12:14 am

Personality Beige

Why is it that when I speak,
People turn the other cheek,
Am I such a crashing bore,
Easier to just ignore.

I feel so terribly confused,
And quite peculiarly amused.

I’m sure I’ll have the last laugh here,
To me it’s absolutely clear…….

That Beige is all the rage this year!!!
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Fri Jan 15, 2010 12:23 am

Lol, it's obvious firefly. The beige one's can't hear you. They are deaf. Do they smell like palma violets lol.
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Mon Jan 18, 2010 5:24 am

I quiet like Palma violets...scrummy LOL. Sorry if i've been a bit beige/vague of late but i think everyone has, people have been busy with xmas and new year festive stuff, relatives, winter blues and the dreaded back to work feeling, now i've seen your poem, read it and thought it was funny and yes, mabe apt, your post will now come back up to the top for others to see........i think :D
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Mon Jan 18, 2010 7:53 pm

hello :)

Terrible colour Beige isn't it..even looks rubbish when typed out heh..Palma Violets, what a blast from the past!

Fun read
thanks
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Tue Jan 19, 2010 1:46 am

Lovely you. Well nice .....Why is it than when I speak............nice
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Thu Jan 21, 2010 5:59 pm

Beige a dull shade not even a colour, nor honey toned like fawn, not even plain brown like shit, a bit shaded and worn is beige......back to the top again :D
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Thu Jan 21, 2010 7:40 pm

This is a nice one, firefly. Cheerful rhyming, and I like your last line a lot.

You might want to have a look at the rhythm of it. It doesn't rock along quite as easily as it could, but you're not far off. Read it aloud to yourself. That always helps.

Cheers

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Pernsona, eh? We live and learn because of (persona). Are you alright?

The "Rod of Young Enock" coming soon for you all. Six months it took me. But please
don't worry about this. I need to split her down it is a book in itself. Why I'm breaking
her down........your obvious reasons.............

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Thu Jan 21, 2010 8:57 pm

Beige is nothing a non anything............it hurts me and violets are old perfume.... :(
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 3:08 am

Thankyou all for your comments. I was feeling very 'beige' when I wrote this - sometimes people just will not listen to what you have to say!

Beige is so damned insignificant and bland, a pseudo-colour. It's just great when prople make you feel THAT good, (not!)

Glad you seem to like this one, I had fun writing it,

Thanks again, firefly x :D
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