Clever Japanese baby crying

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ki no sei

Fri Dec 30, 2005 9:53 pm

wa wa wa wa wa
wa wa wa wa wa wa wa
wa wa wa wa wa




In Japanese, wa means "sum", "harmony", "peace", "ancient Japan", "ring", "hoop", "circle", "bird counter", "rabbit counter", and "bundle counter".

So, what is the baby crying for?
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 2:45 am

The child is crying for a parent who knows how to teach it real Japanese, and not some crap picked up off the net.

'Wa' can be a prefix indicating emotion or admiration, it is also used as a a suffix at the end of many adopted western words. And, as you must know, it also occurs in the middle of many words; for instance - 'azaWArau' - to ridicule, 'bakasaWAgi - fooling around.

So, either the baby's genuine and needs attention, or you should just fuck off and stop trying to piss everybody off!!

Sayonara, as they say in Glasgow.
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 10:50 am

What a charming and eloquent reply.

The poem is either deep beyond my imaginings, or it is extracting the urine out of the poetry process.
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 2:16 pm

barrie,

you have grown in my eyes, good sir. you are most right: posts like this one are a waste of time, and an irritating one at that.

who doesn't know,

I suggest you stop trying to teach us Japanese kitsch and actually attempt something with viscera.

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Sat Dec 31, 2005 5:19 pm

Barrie,

We strongly suspect that KNS is Ray's oriental love-child. They certainly share the same IP address - along with a propensity for glib, pseudo-intellectual horse manure.
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 6:56 pm

Yes, KNS is my alterego for when I write Japanese.

I am not here to give anybody a lesson in Japanese.

It's evident from your responses that Glasgow (and some other parts of the globe) isn't immune to the insular.

Dada Expression isn't everyone's cuppa tea but it doesn't warrant you to tell me to fuck off, in saying so you make yourserlf sound like a right prat.
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 7:00 pm

Still, fuck off does have a right lovely ring to it.



Not to play the hypocrite, alter egos are generally shunned or treated with psychotrops.
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 7:32 pm

Bombadil, what a humourous chap you are. I am not talking about personality disorder.
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 7:38 pm

You're getting just the type of response dada has always gotten, Ray. There is the added complication of Japanese, which you do not appear to have mastered yet. What did you expect?
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 8:00 pm

Glad you heard me. All I heard was a baby crying....or was it the sound of one hand cla.....no.

Hasta la vista as they say in Tokyo.

cheers
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 8:19 pm

pseud wrote:You're getting just the type of response dada has always gotten, Ray. There is the added complication of Japanese, which you do not appear to have mastered yet. What did you expect?
So, I'm assuming YOU can speak Japanese?
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 8:21 pm

No sir, I didn't write the poem.

But Barry seems to have raised some good points.

Is he wrong?
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 9:37 pm

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Sat Dec 31, 2005 9:44 pm

pseud wrote:Barry seems to have raised some good points.

Is he wrong?
I have no idea what he knows about Japanese. But to say that "wa" is found in between other words in Japanese is a bit like that loony saying that there is a code in the Bible. He is not wrong or right as far as I can tell, I know that "wa" is in between so many Japanese words, e.g., "aWAre" (which is specifically used in certain description of Japanese poetry). So, what's he driving at? :?
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 11:07 pm

Ridiculing and fooling around; the words containing 'wa' were chosen specifically for that reason; I was making a point. About the same time as the advent of your alter-ego, we had Jock the Rhymer with his 'poem' about rain, and Spiderman, the political critic (with his 1000 hits). Then I read 'wa wa wa ....What did you expect, constructive criticism? As far as I was concerned it was someone else taking the piss?

Why the alter-ego, what's wrong with your usual identity? Would've saved a lot of bother and bruised alter-egos.

So on this New Years Eve, Herr Trivedi, I will say this - Gomen nasai - - Wakarimasu ka? But my original sentiments still apply to ki no sei.

btw, I liked 'the Kingfisher'.

cheers.
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 11:14 pm

Hey man, HAPPY NEW YEAR TO YOU TOO.

Yeah, I appreciate you appreciating the 'hidden' meaning of kingfisher.

And don't call me Herr, if you do, I'll start posting things in German, I've got two short things in German.
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 11:18 pm

como se dice....
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 11:18 pm

I think I'm going to have to start writing things in French, just to be different. Now where did I put my old French degree work?
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Sat Dec 31, 2005 11:20 pm

uh oh. I'm not sure I like where this is going. I can hardly keep up with the subtle digs and jokes in English...
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Sun Jan 01, 2006 1:17 am

heh heh I find it hard enough to write a good poem in English, so god only kows how the French one might go. Could take another decade to write :lol:
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Sun Jan 01, 2006 5:12 am

I think we are in danger of becoming much too erudite for our own mutual good. Let's post, majorally, in English, many of us, surely, could show off our multi-lingual prowess, but that is likely all it would be.


Cheers,

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Sun Jan 01, 2006 7:34 pm

Right on Keith.

honestly - who wants dill (our Oxford friend) cussing them out in Latin or Old English?
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